Ether 8:11
1830 Edition
And now Omer was a friend to Akish, wherefore when Jared had sent for Akish, the daughter of Jared danced before him, that she pleased him, insomuch that he desired her to wife. And it came to pass that he said unto Jared, Give her unto me to wife.
Changes
Simple English
Omer was a friend to Akish. So when Jared sent for Akish, Jared’s daughter danced for him. She made him so happy that he wanted to marry her. He said to Jared: Let me marry her.
Paraphrase
Akish was a friend of Omer. When Jared sent for him, the daughter danced before him. She captivated him completely. He wanted her as his wife. So he said to Jared, 'Give her to me in marriage.'
Notes
"A striking parallel is the beheading of John the Baptist in the New Testament and the attempted beheading of King Omer in the Book of Mormon. In Matthew 14:6-11 we read how the daughter of Herodias 'danced before' and 'pleased' Herod. When Herod promised to give her 'whatsoever she would ask,' she wanted 'John Baptist's head in a charger.' -Jerald and Sandra Tanner, Joseph Smith's Plagiarism of the Bible in the Book of Mormon, p. 16
Note the parallels and repeated words in Ether 8:10-12.