3 Nephi 16:10
1830 Edition
And thus commandeth the Father that I should say unto you at that day, When the Gentiles shall sin against my Gospel, and shall reject the fulness of my Gospel, and shall be lifted up in the pride of their hearts above all nations, and above all the people of the whole earth, and shall be filled with all manner of lyings, and of deceits, and of mischiefs, and all manner of hypocrisy, and murders, and priestcrafts, and whoredoms, and of secret abominations; and if they shall do all these things, and shall reject the fulness of my Gospel, behold, saith the Father, I will bring the fulness of my Gospel from among them;
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Simple English
The Father tells me to say this to you: When the non-Jewish people sin against my good news and reject my full message, they will become proud. They will think they are better than all other nations and people on earth. They will be filled with lies and tricks and mean acts. They will be filled with fake goodness and murder and religious tricks and bad sexual acts and secret evil things. If they do all these things and reject my full message, the Father says he will take his full message away from them.
Paraphrase
the Father commands me to tell you this: When the Gentiles sin against my good news, when they reject everything I’ve offered them, when they become arrogant—thinking they’re better than every nation and every people on earth—when they fill themselves with lies, deceit, cruelty, hypocrisy, murder, religious corruption, sexual sin, and secret evil—if they do all this and reject my good news, the Father says: I’ll take it away from them.
Notes
3 Nephi 16:8-15 is a prime example of the circular repetition that pervades the Book of Mormon.
"my people who are of the house of Israel have been cast out... and I have caused my people who are of the house of Israel to be smitten... I will remember my covenant with I have made unto my people, O house of Israel... But if the Gentiles will repent and return unto me, saith the Father, behold they shall be numbered among my people, O house of Israel. And I will not suffer my people who are of the house of Israel, to go among them, and tread them down... But if they will not turn unto me...I will suffer them, yea I will suffer my people, O house of Israel, that they shall go through among them, and shall tread them down, and they shall be as salt that hath lost its savior... to be cast out, and to be trodden under foot of my people, O house of Israel."
This repetitive writing style is found to be consistent across each author of the Book of Mormon. See also, Alma 5:6, 2 Nephi 3:4-21, and Ether 2:17.
Mormon critic M.T. Lamb made the rather axiomatic comment, "The prevailing style of the Book of Mormon is so verbose, so full of inelegant and uncalled-for repetitions, that any ordinary writer can greatly excel it-often reducing its wordy sentences to one-half, and one-third, and even one-fourth their present compass without any sacrifice of thought or force or beauty..." -M.T. Lamb, The Golden Bible; or The Book of Mormon, Is It From God? (New York: Ward and Drummand, 1887), p. 27.
The verbose, lengthy, and repetitive style of the Book of Mormon casts doubt on the authenticity of the Book of Mormon. As Jerald and Sandra note, "Considering the effort needed to make the original gold plates of the Book of Mormon and then to engrave them, one would expect a scribe to be as concise as possible, not wordy. Nephi's brother, Jacob complained: 'I cannot write but a little of my words, because of the difficulty of engraving our words upon plates' (Jacob 4:1). However, lengthy sentences abound in the Book of Mormon." -Jerald and Sandra Tanner, Joseph Smith's Plagiarism of the Bible in the Book of Mormon, p. 231.
B.H. Roberts, president of the LDS First Quorum of the Seventy and assistant church historian made these candid remarks, "... I shall hold that what is here presented [concerning various accounts of Anti-Christs in the Book of Mormon] illustrates sufficiently the matter taken in hand by referring to them, namely that they are all of one breed and brand; so nearly alike that one mind is the author of them, and that a young and undeveloped, but piously inclined mind. The evidence I sorrowfully submit, points to Joseph Smith as their creator. It is difficult to believe that they are the product of history..." -B.H. Roberts, Studies of the Book of Mormon, ed. Brigham H. Madsen (Salt Lake City: Signature Books, 1992), p. 264.
Other examples of verbose sections: 3 Nephi 8:1-3; 3 Nephi 10:37 (compare against Matt. 23:37); 3 Nephi 16:8-10.